tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-94172508277517309.post6500207075672322173..comments2011-02-05T07:49:16.230-08:00Comments on Songs For Shifting Skies.: Claws.Brendan T. Kellyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11425030303003745780noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-94172508277517309.post-86965140337993729332010-05-08T22:19:46.624-07:002010-05-08T22:19:46.624-07:00Love this poem! reminds me of so many books and mo...Love this poem! reminds me of so many books and movies Ive seen. Some of My favorites are so predictable, i wonder why I like them.Crickethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13301425164805406362noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-94172508277517309.post-49959767556580408582010-04-30T10:01:10.045-07:002010-04-30T10:01:10.045-07:00pretty cool, I like that last line with the clawle...pretty cool, I like that last line with the clawless bear,Frankhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09603658475519722873noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-94172508277517309.post-26168668710477611132010-04-26T21:46:02.013-07:002010-04-26T21:46:02.013-07:00like your stuff man, am following.like your stuff man, am following.Audacity of Sagacityhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03907766564701828457noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-94172508277517309.post-63734264335746488462010-04-23T19:33:41.623-07:002010-04-23T19:33:41.623-07:00Brendan,
I'm glad that you understand...I was...Brendan,<br /><br />I'm glad that you understand...I was worried because I wasn't sure if my honesty would be accepted...some people are touchy about things.DeLunaLorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03201643887846419244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-94172508277517309.post-22730975400074522522010-04-23T04:14:36.175-07:002010-04-23T04:14:36.175-07:00Haha, no worries. I put the stuff up for honest op...Haha, no worries. I put the stuff up for honest opinions, so I appreciate it. I moved the lines around a bit as I wrote it, and I was playing with a version where the "clawless" line was the last. You're right, though, reading it now, it would have been better the other way.<br />Thanks!Brendan T. Kellyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11425030303003745780noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-94172508277517309.post-87302522643291969202010-04-22T19:41:41.885-07:002010-04-22T19:41:41.885-07:00Brendon,
I enjoy reading this poem, and I truly l...Brendon,<br /><br />I enjoy reading this poem, and I truly like the work. Yet I feel like the poem finishes well with the lines "and no one is injured, when you're a clawless bear." The final two lines feel like they're a beginning of a new piece rather than the ending of the current piece...Please forgive me if I've offended you, but do understand that my inner critique had a need to be expressed.<br /><br />Good work!<br /><br />FranDeLunaLorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03201643887846419244noreply@blogger.com